You soothed this scarred warrior and removed my suit of armour.
The air full of static, in a state of unrest, I took off what was left: my dress –
wearing nothing underneath, revealing all ever so slowly, I found it hard to breathe – all the while, your eyes hypnotised, you stood and stared, paralysed.
The anticipation, exquisite. The waiting, excruciating.
You, winter moth mesmerised by my icy flame, broke the spell and we both fell β rough display morphed into a graceful ballet before switching back again.
We burnt, we slurred our words, drunk to the hilt on our chemistry, while around us all was dark, as the stars had gone into hiding, wishing to throw a veil over the unchaste proceedings.
Just in time, the rain came down, saving us and our surroundings from burning to the ground.
Image credit: Amarelle07 @deviantart.com
Incendiary stuff! β€
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I’m glad you liked, Al. I went through writer’s doubt with that one. You know that thing when you go:
It’s really good.
It’s not too bad
It’s barely okay
Actually it’s shit.
In the end, I cut out a couple of sentences that I thought were just, er…too much haha and thought I’d publish it anyway.
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I go through the same process on a regular basis! Comes with the territory π
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A terrific piece of writing. π
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Thank you, Alan for another lovely, supportive comment. Which I really appreciate because I wasn’t sure about this piece at all. πΆ
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Wonderful intense passion. Your metaphors are exquisite.
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Thank you so very much, I wasn’t sure about this one so your words are the most wonderful balm for my doubts π
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I think you do a great job of avoiding cliches. It’s one of the things I love about your writing. It’s fresh.
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What a lovely compliment! Thank you π
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Yeah! I like that Nathalie, you done that good! π
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Thank you so much, I’m so pleased you enjoyed π
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oh god, that’s f-ing hot! Really nice!
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Oh, major exhalation of relief here. If you deem it okay, then it IS okay lol
I really had doubts about this one, I was like, do I like it JUST because it’s such a personal experience and because it has actually just happened? So I didn’t know and now you guys have told me it’s fine, it’s fine haha
Thanks, Vic. If anybody knows about hot writing, it’s you π
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Omg, you’re the sweetest thing. Though, I’ve read plenty of heat from you. You can’t help it, that’s just who you are. You exude sensuality and I realize that sounds like a come on, lol, but it’s just the truth. π I do know what you mean though- sometimes you’re thinking about something that happened and you’ve no idea if your words adequately conveyed the heat of it as it runs through your mind. You definitely conveyed that heat though. Very nicely! π
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Haha it DOES sound like a come on, so did my previous comment to you now I think of it π
Seriously though, YES! You’ve perfectly described it: “sometimes you’re thinking about something that happened and you’ve no idea if your words adequately conveyed the heat of it as it runs through your mind.”
Thanks again, you lovely, hot girl π
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Lol, you’re very welcome! ππ
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What a sensual, evocative cover and the dialogue was steaming. Emoting right of the page and that is what writing is all about – feelings and emotions. π
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Thank you very much π
I totally agree with you: for me writing is about feelings and emotions.
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Fantastic!
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Thank you, Holly π π
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My pleasure<3
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Wonderful, Nathalie!! πππ love this a lot!!!
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Thank you so much, Eric! πππ
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Most enjoyable! πΉπ
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Thank you very much π π
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I am certainly happy that I had seen this today instead of last night, or I would have joined you with my dark circles. Now excuse me while I read it again. And again.
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The Picture in this fits and blends so well with your romantic poeticism.
Beautifully well written.
You express yourself in a tone of dark and light but bring in the flavor of all 2 elements into one. Excellent. π
P.S Don’t forget to check your email for our collaboration. π
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Thank you, Charlie. I’m sorry I’m taking so long, I’ll email you a bit later π
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It’s quite alright. π
How have you been my friend?
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It’s beautiful. It’s complicated. It’s an enjoyable read.
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Thank you ever so much π
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You’re welcome.
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It’s gorgeous! Love it #WriterSister π
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Thank you so much, #WriterSister π
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I always laugh because notice how the saucy ones always garner the most ‘likes’ ha ha ha! Our sex starved souls! π You give a new meaning to haut!
(I like it when you post little pieces of a story, they are tantilizing and it’s a really good idea and it works. Your prose has encouraged me to try it, and I ended up writing a really SICK FUCK of a book I may email it to you when you are less busy with all your studies, I don’t want to interupt those but I would like your opinion more than anyone elses as to whether it reveals me as a deviant or just a good french girl ;))
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